Poetry

So, I wrote this poem tonight. It's based on a few different things. First of all, it's based on my feelings - past, present, and probably future. It's that caught-in-between wanting someone to know how you feel and not wanting them to know how you feel all at once. Second, it's based on the awkwardness of Middle Schoolers, which I see daily. Third, I wanted to play around with some words. Thesaurus work, I like to call it. There are a few spots in the poem where I intentionally created redundancies for effect. I don't know if it reads the same as I felt it did as I wrote it or read through it. I may edit this, or I may just keep it as is. It took me about 15 minutes to write, which is so much quicker than ANY of my other poetry has ever been, so you never know if it's good or bad based on that...

Let me know what you think. That goes for simple reactions to the poem or editing thoughts. I'm open to any and all at this point.

Just one look,
That's all it takes:
I melt from the warmth
Radiating from your eyes.
I am sure my ears are
Scarlet or Crimson or Magenta.
I am a puddle on the floor.
Do you see me here?
Please don't see me here!
Take care or you'll slip,
Slide, skip, fall down -
Down here with me.
How can I catch just one
Glimpse, peek, quick look
without getting caught?
Get caught! What then?
Awkward shift...
Look away!
Peer around my book to see
You looking the other direction.
Did you see me?
Maybe you saw me!
*Sigh* You saw me!

I don't know. Now that I'm reading back through it, I think this would be MUCH better as a performance poem than as a written poem. It doesn't come across the same.